Thursday, June 11, 2015

Promises


Picture credit:   here

woman's eyes
catch his
lie
smooth as silk red-purple tie-
he smiles giddily
neck strained
faking remorse
with hands perfumed
lilac,
words drip honey-dew, sweetest
of plums
 ~ promises ~
plums of
sweetest, dew-honey drip on words
lilac
perfumed hands with
remorse, faking
strained neck
giddily, he smiles
(as he) ties purple-red silk smoothly
(the) lie
his, catches
woman's eyes

Posted for D'verse Poets Pub - A twist for Palindrome form, hosted by Mary ~   Thanks for the visit ~

30 comments:

  1. Excellent 'palindrome,' Grace. You worked the form beautifully. Women's eyes are perceptive eyes. They see what is beneath the surface, are not fooled by giddy smiles.

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  2. Great use of the form! I did not think about the possibility of having shorter lines but I find that the way you use them adds a lot to your poem as it seems to mirror the woman's quick and perceptive looks.

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  3. Perfect words describes a woman's eyes totally! Great photo too.

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  4. Nice, your few additions and modifications make this flow smooth. I like how the turn line is highlighted there in the middle as well. After the turn it got really emotive as well. Well played.

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  5. Only a fool would think they can fool such eyes

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  6. Is a great shot Grace and nice poem!}xo

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  7. WOW, this is a spectacular palindrome, the reversal makes his behavior even more guilty-sounding.......loved it. Can almost see him, face all red........

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  8. an awesome palindrome Grace...truly mirroring some truths...

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  9. wonderfully written but i felt guilty after reading this (lol)

    Grace-fully said

    gracias

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  10. Those lies he ties.. I would think that that requires a smooth operator.. something you would prefer not to get involved with.

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  11. Brilliant and deliciously vivid.

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  12. Great take, smooth mirror poem; even harder because you reverse words positions as well as lines. I, also, had to tweak the mirrored lines a bit to even out the backward flow; excellent job on this one.

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  13. Wow, Grace...you worked this in such a way that the palindrome effect seems seamless--perhaps because you wrote it in one stanza. Very nicely executed.

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  14. Very nicely done! I like the effect of the uneven lines and slight alterations, making it surprisingly unpredictable.

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  15. Wow! Love this form (and what you've done with it). I will have to give it a try. Wonderful wordsmithing (your forte, Grace). Definitely set my sleaze antennae a-tingling. Smiles.

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  16. Women's eyes are bewitching, the first element on the 'come hither look' to be seen. Beautifully penned, Grace! Great work on the palindrome!

    Hank

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  17. This is a true mirrored poem...because the words would not be in the same order witing the lines...well done!!

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  18. The shorter lines are perfect for this poem and the way it is all one, instead of separated into two separate stanzas just beyond rock this. I can feel/see her eyes flicking about, seeing all, even see her nostrils flare as she smells the falseness of his lilac scented hands...artificial lilac is just beyond nasty and perfect for this.

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  19. I'm out of stellar comments, Grace--this poem is stunning!

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  20. Ah, he's been found out! Well done, Grace.

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  21. Keen eyes sense the presence of purple danger here; a smashing palindrome, Grace! I also wrote mine as a unified stanza...

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  22. (;.. Too them.. for well.. is empathy hell.. in live psychopaths.
    eyes of love see eyes of lies..
    psychopath love.. distilled.. empath of love..
    love of empath.. distilled.. love psychopath..
    lies of eyes see love of eyes..
    psychopaths live in hell .. empathy is well.. for them Too..;)

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  23. I really liked how the viewpoint shifted from the woman's point of view with emphasis on her suspicion to his attempt at hiding his lie. Exquisite :D

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  24. Wonderful, Grace. Love the lilac and honey-dew drip.

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  25. Faking remorse... I hate when that happens.

    Hi Grace

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  26. Faking remorse... I hate when that happens.

    Hi Grace

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  27. A women's eyes are sharp something which the other has to look out for.. lest the lies be caught..! Well penned :D

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