Thursday, January 8, 2015

Gratitude


 Source:   Page 115, The Modern Prometheus

Love,

have a care-

Work this passion

                   of its excess

Return a hundred fold:  peace

Demand 

gratification

small as acorns

                   & berries

My companion will be content

with the same fare -

Our bed of dried leaves

                    & the sun 

ripen(ing) our food-


This is the result of blackout poetry process.   The original is a page from The Modern Prometheus.





Posted for:   D'verse Poet Pub - Blackout poetry, hosted by Bjorn Rudberg

and Poetry Jam - One word for 2015:   hosted by Alan ~  Mine is Gratitude.


32 comments:

  1. cool - you took the same text that i took and it led you somewhere completely different... the gratitude is felt and leaves a warm feel

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  2. nice...work the passion of its excess...and return peace....its a cool progression that...it is cool too seeing how you and claudia used the same text and yet came up with some very different verses.....

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  3. This is so well done, and as you picked the same page as Claudia I find it amazing that you could come up with something so entirely different..

    Demand

    gratification

    small as acorns

    & berries

    Amazing.. there are quite a lot of words to choose from.

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  4. Wow, same book, same page as Claudia; extra cool. I had singled out the lines Bjorn mentioned, but the whole new poem works well; nice take on the challenge.

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  5. A bed of dry leaves & the sun - sounds quite heavenly to me! Indeed interesting to compare your take with Claudia's.

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  6. I have come from Poetry Jam so I have not read Claudia's poem yet but apparently I will read a very different one over there.
    Gratitude is a great choice of words and I often hope that I will never forget to be grateful for all the beauties, even those as 'small as acorns', in my life.

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  7. "Return a hundred fold: peace" I love that. Wishing you a gratitude-filled year, Grace!

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  8. do like the acorns and berries line... as lovely as always

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  9. Exceptional, Grace. I see Patricia liked the acorns and berries line and that's just what I was going to say, too. So many gifts in those small things. Google is driving me crazy. It posts me as anonymous even though I put in my link. Arrgh.
    Victoria

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  10. Blackout poetry looks very intriguing. Have not tried it yet. Good one, Grace.

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  11. this is such a cool concept! great choice of words!

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  12. Grace, love how you created such a beautiful scene. Gratitude is an excellent word :-)

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  13. A nice spot to lean back and enjoy the sun, as the passion is sure given a run

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  14. So very cool, your work always has such a beautiful feel to it. I could feel the sun.

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  15. Very interesting and "Gratitude" a perfect choice of word. "Love, have a care-"
    is a very impassioned and layered start to the piece. I think I'll be ruminating on that line for a while. Which is by way of saying: Great writing!

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  16. I love the feel of this, particularly the resolution in the ending.

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  17. I just read Claudia's poem and find it interesting how you both took the same page , yet wove totally different poems. The amazing beauty of the creative mind.

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  18. Such a lovely poem... and excellent selection of words.

    ~Prajakta

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  19. This is simply beautiful, Grace! What you found to keep is a treasure.

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  20. Grace, your style is unmistakable in this piece. Lovely.

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  21. How lovely, Grace. Your own voice shines through, even in this format.

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  22. The only problem with arriving late is that everyone has already said how lovely the poem is. But, it is. There is a pleasing simplicity and the peace the speaker asks for.

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  23. Love the idea of reclining on a bed of leaves warming in the sun:)
    Tigerbrite

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  24. Stunning work! I love this form and you do a wonderful job of taming the prose into poetry. No need to visit mine it's a repost from 2012.

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  25. Fun to see your blackout poem. Also I like the word gratitude for 2015. Such an important and rewarding thing to keep in mind.

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  26. you did an awesome job with the word choice!

    i really love the ending.

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  27. It is a good selection of words brought together, Reminds me of that Beat era maniac William S. Burroughs and his "cut up" style. Though his work was never this tender to the heart.

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  28. Gratitude in love goes long way...sounds so peacefully...

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  29. This is such a graceful poem that is so full of amazing natural metaphors. :) Promotion of peace clearly evident.

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  30. This is lovely, Grace. Works so well. Thanks. K. Manicddaily

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