Wednesday, July 25, 2012

Awakening


           
                                                   Yellow-frayed memory
                                                   Cutting deep wounds
                                                   Black inferno
                                    Twisting sky                               
                                    Into backward time relapse             
                                    Dripping melancholy
                                                  Gather them all  
                                                  Ink and pen, cloud seeds  
                                                  Verses, red    
                        Stories, orange           
                        White escape
                        Revitalizing spirit
                                                 Awakening eyes
                                                 Magical
                                                                journey



picture credit:   here

37 comments:

  1. Look at your tornado shaping! SO cool. :)

    This is awesome: "Yellow-frayed memory / Cutting deep wounds / Black inferno"

    Writing and examining IS a magical journey that can provide healing ... or make you crazy. Definitely one or the other. ;)

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  2. Really well done, Grace. I love "white escape" as sort of a pivot line into the close.

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  3. They can surely awaken, the strikes bring quite the flash to the mind.

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  4. I love how your poem is laid out to look like a twister. You begin with such a strong image, and the poem gathers momentum all the way through to the last word.

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  5. it is all part of the journey...the dark and the light...deep wounds are just the reminders of where we have been...it does have a tornado shape to it...when the house lands, follow the yellow brick rd...smiles...

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  6. Wow! The wild magic of the GORGEOUSLY placed and streaming so quickly backwards of all experienced, gathered and flowing forward again to us:
    "Ink and pen, cloud seeds
    Verses, red
    Stories, orange
    White escape
    Revitalizing spirit
    Awakening eyes"
    in this so "magical journey."

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  7. Magically structured! Enjoyed this immensely.

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  8. As was mentioned...I love the momentum!! And this:

    " Ink and pen, cloud seeds
    Verses, red
    Stories, orange
    White escape"

    Excellent poem, Grace!!

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  9. a magical response, Grace! i really love this!

    thank you for joining in at Poetry Jam!


    dani

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    1. Thank you for the lovely prompt Dani ~

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  10. What a perfect response to the prompt! It's beautiful, and so imaginative. Can you hear the admiring cheers from here?
    K

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    1. You are very sweet to say so ~ Thank you for the compliments and visit ~

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  11. Life can certainly be a storm...love how you not only drew a picture with words but in form also. Ah but after the storm clears life returns with brilliant colors of hope...Love this!

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  12. I loved reading your words! So much imagery here. Lovely!

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  13. Great twister shape which helps drive the energy of this from quiet opening to unmistakable and powerful ending. Very vivid, and lovely.

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  14. Ah, the roller coaster of life
    And our attempts to sort it all out as we ride.
    Nicely done, Grace
    Rick

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  15. It IS a magical journey. I love this, Grace.

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  16. Yes, I like that white escape also. Very interesting colors there at the end and throughout. And wonderful shaping! k.

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  17. I like the skeletal weave of this, pairing down your words to snapshots of life. Nice.

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  18. I love the dance of your ideas and the mood of this poem! :D
    The colors added a vivid view~

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  19. Your words do take me on a magical journey !!!

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  20. I liked the flow of your poem, Grace. Thank you for sharing. :)

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  21. Beautifully expressed thoughts, Grace.

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  22. Life is magically colorful...wonderful.

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  23. Grace, this is so very lovely. I'm feeling a delicate little tap style of dance. I love that you have gathered them as seeds and colored with magic, keeping the eye awake. Love.

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  24. You took me along on this magical journey. Thanks Grace.

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  25. Beautiful poem and description! I love watching storms!

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  26. Beautiful and graceful, Grace! Haven't been here for a long time, I know, and I'm thrilled to visit my favorites again and see you are as wonderful as ever!
    Best, M.

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  27. Some memories are truly not very good to wake. But "white escape - revitalizing spirith"! And the white escape is Christ. We are not slaves to the sin but got loose by the love of Christ! Thank you Lord!

    Nice touch!

    ▲ A ▲

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  28. What an intense journey! Love this one!

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  29. Woww this really magical...i read it many times.....

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