Friday, November 18, 2011

Passage




steady rushing sound
water twirls, marches to beat 
gateway to new lands

eagle wings soaring  
ragged mountains in slumber
gentle solitude 

ashes in the urn
scattered in river he loves
spirit soaring sky



Posted for In Tandem # 19 - picture credit to Jacqui Binford-Bell 


Haiku Heights - Prompt is Urn.   Poetry form 3 lines, 5-7-5 syllables

11 comments:

  1. Excellent illustration of the eternal passageway. Each stanza is really good and the ashes in the urn/scattered in river he loves/spirit soaring sky really adds a mortal presence in a poem that is mainly up until that point a wondrous flow of nature and emotive movement. Really great job here. Thanks

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  2. A solemn take for a Tandem ride, but excellent interpretation of the picture. Thanks for pedalling with us again this week. ♥

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  3. Great take on the flowing river, Grace! Meandering lazily but serving the purposes beautifully expressed by you.

    Hank

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  4. Well expressed ideas here in the haiku!! Many 'S' words and you write alliteratively in the last line!! :) Lovely!!

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  5. Perfect words for the image - especially the last one.

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  6. Beautiful Haiku and image...You used the prompt so creatively...nice work

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  7. I LOVE THEM! THey all flow just like the picture.

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  8. Just a few days back I had gone with my Brother In Law to immerse the ashes of my sister in a river.. only none of knew that is where we would be immersing her ashes.. none of us was ready.. your poem reminded me of those moments..

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  9. Grace - I love this set; Jacqui Binford-Bell
    is a favorite of mine for her colors ... your piece works well with this choice!

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  10. I indeed loved the third one, so full of spirituality. Showing our path to eternity, just like this haiku suite.

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  11. The scattering of ashes is a deeply moving act of farewell...



    My Take on the Prompt

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