cold winds herald winter’s carriage,
city skyline heaves in mushroom dust
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white is the night in december,
paler than the moon half dressed in black
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red rose bush stoops low on ground,
winter is a heavy child to carry
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snow flakes blanketing car windows,
muddy prints against vanilla sky
Wishing you Happy New Year !
Posted for: D'verse Poets Pub: Form for all: CRYSTALLINES:
Couplets poetry form: Haiku (17 syllables)
Shared with Flash Fiction Friday: for the G-man. We finally have snow. It came after Christmas day. Thankfully it is light and erratic but still the ice must be scraped from the car before the drive. Thanks for the visit.
picture credit: here
Excellent contrasting lines! I love "mushroom dust," "winter is a heavy child to carry," and "muddy prints against vanilla sky." I love that movie, as well as Vanilla Fields perfume. :)
ReplyDeleteI haven't written any couplets yet, but you can check this out if you'd like:
http://rosemarymint.wordpress.com/2011/12/28/fortune-tellers-misfortune/
These are lovely Grace. I especially like the second one. Blessings to you and yours for a great 2012.
ReplyDeleteThese are BRILLIANT Grace. I'm so jealous. Writing has been quite difficult for me lately but your lovely lines has imbued me with joy and hope. Thank you for sharing! Gay
ReplyDeleteoops, should be "have". You see what I mean ;-)
ReplyDeleteGorgeous...
ReplyDeleteHi Grace, these are lovely. I especially like:
ReplyDeletered rose bush stoops low on ground,
winter is a heavy child to carry
Terrific. K.
Wow, beautiful contrast. Love it!
ReplyDeleteFantastic play with the form! Loved each and every one...and Happy New Year to you too :)
ReplyDeleteThese are great, Grace! A scene reminiscent of a snowy New Year in the making and in contrasting styles.
ReplyDeleteHank
Grace, these are beautiful; however, they make me feel VERY cold! But then again, it IS winter!
ReplyDeletewinter is a heavy child to carry nice line...have yet to see any white stuff here...would love to...
ReplyDeleteThat second one is just gorgeous!
ReplyDeleteThe last one is my favourite, love the muddy prints against the sky :) Happy New Year
ReplyDeletelove the winter image on top,
ReplyDeletewinter is a heavy child to carry..
This line is vivid and brilliant,
love your 55.
Happy New Year.
lovely and loved the 'vanilla sky' :)
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The picture is beautiful. I love the imagery in the poetry, especially "winter is a heavy child to carry." Very nice.
ReplyDeleteSecond and Third are splendid! Such a classy 55!
ReplyDeleteGood use of couplets to capture a winter's day
ReplyDeleteThese are absolutely beautiful! Great photo as well. I think the third is my favorite-I feel that way about winter also.
ReplyDeleteGrace...
ReplyDeleteI don't think that I was linked here.
I could have missed this awesome little Gem of yours. Fortunately I came a lookin for ya!
Loved your 55 My Friend.
Thanks for your brilliance and support this past year...You Rock The Provence!!
Have a Kick Ass New Year.....G
Just beautiful! The middle two are my favorites, with this one having just melted my heart:
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winter is a heavy child to carry
The new blog is a delightful surprise. :)
Happy New Year.
The middle two I found enthralling. I read them both several times. Exceptional.
ReplyDeleteI think these are wonderful!
ReplyDeleteoh, white color, winter rose, and more,
ReplyDeletethose form mind blowing imagery,
your couplets are well done.
vanilla sky - trying to imagine the fragrance of Vanilla Air Wick sprayed into the vast sky
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