Thursday, May 24, 2012

The eye




white computer screen 
trains eye to spot the box edges, 
grey walls with polite glances and gestures


summer sun invites, glitters office window
a co-worker said she walked outside for a break
beautiful day to catch blue butterflies and goldfish


it could have been winter
mind on the cube full of files and sheets,  
details today, breakfast meeting tomorrow


black cane in hand, he proudly smiles 
as he wraps himself back to work like a busy bee, 
regained health now precious as a white diamond


i search while driving the busy freeway, moody as a crab,
ignoring thirst for cold yogurt and freshly buttered croissants,      
mind wanders on foot, overtaking huge trailer trucks  


full of merchandise, sales goals, expectations, hellos 
and goodbyes to busy people revolving the office doors, 
while my eye follows a seagull soaring above the orange lit sky 


gliding over the creek, a flash of silver plume in forest wild, 
     
it is a beautiful day 




Posted for D'verse Poets Pub:   Stream of Consciousness Writing


picture credit:   here


  

22 comments:

  1. a beautiful day to start with your beautiful poem...Loved it...:)

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  2. I like this a lot, Grace. I feel as I was with you as you went through your day....and yes, indeed, it was a beautiful one.

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  3. It was a great day here as well, although I can feel the things that aren't so swell. Stinkin traffic is all around and slow pokes like to be in the way all the time..haha

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  4. This is wonderful stream of consciousness, Grace. A croissant and yogurt sound good right about now.

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  5. This definately streamed with a kool expression of seemingly random consciousness that made sense in an abstract way. It reads beautifully. You possess such skill.

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  6. Impressive, sunny subconscious that maintain optimism amid the daily stresses. Your description of the guy with the black cane was very interesting and made me want to know more about him.

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  7. my eye watches that gull as well in its freedom in the midst of all the rest...you really give a sense of place in all your details...rich write grace...and enjoyed...smiles...

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  8. Grace, this is a great journey through the work day then all of a sudden the beauty of the last stanza in nature. If it were not for those moments I do believe we would all be completely crazy. And like Frank, I want to know more about the black cane guy!

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  9. such a clever weaving of the abstract and concrete ... very cool - I found myself completely intrigued

    http://aleapingelephant.blogspot.ca/2012/05/drinking-from-mania-cup.html

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  10. Lovely weave in and out of real and daydreams. I want to be the seagull after a croissant and yogurt, please :)

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  11. Everyday is beautiful when you look at it as you have. Beautifully done.

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  12. Daydreaming along the highway can beget lots of inspiration! A workday of great expectations and everyday is a dream! Great write Grace!

    Hank

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  13. How wonderful to rise above the busy world. Your seagull reminded me of Joanathan Livingston Seagull.

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  14. It is indeed a beautiful day. You have some delightful phrases here, including "moody as a crab"!

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  15. i usually go for lunchbreak walks as well..just to smell the sun and a bit of forest air...love the part with the seagull.. a felt piece grace

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  16. Beautifully written! Love the way I was carried right along with your thoughts right to the seagull at the end.

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  17. Nature offers the best breaks. My eye would have been on that soaring gull too. SoC works really nicely here.

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  18. This is just beautiful, Grace. A really fine and accomplished poem that swept me away with it, each scene vividly seen. And this stanza is powerful beyond belief:

    black cane in hand, he proudly smiles
    as he wraps himself back to work like a busy bee,
    regained health now precious as a white diamond

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  19. A beautiful day indeed.

    '...busy people revolving the office doors' - wonderful descriptive words.

    Anna :o]

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  20. My favourite line in this- 'it could have been winter'- this just contrasted with the beauty of the day outside whilst you were stuck in that office cube and looking at that computer screen....seems strange for me to pick this line amongst all the others- as you write beautifully here- but it just resonated- particularly as on this day it was the first sunny day in the UK for about 8 weeks!!! Great to see into your world- and to see your thoughts I tampered with as you let them flow

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  21. beautiful day to catch blue butterflies and goldfish
    - such a one - felt the total freshness - gorgeous - Lib

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