Friday, October 7, 2011

Thoughts

white jasmine flowers
scattered on carved wooden feet, 
favors for the Gods

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chasing the sun's tail
above spaces of white clouds,
pale moon puffed and huffed 


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pockmarked red apples
basket of handpicked harvest;
black crows all in rows




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butterfly wings framed
adorning white walls; pricking
skin of conscience



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pink frangipani
falling on rusty park bench;
rose scent stirring crypt


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yellow maple leaves
falling on wide brim straw hat;
early prognosis



Posted for D'Verse Poets Pub - Form for All.   My favorite poetry forms - haiku and senryu.

16 comments:

  1. These are gorgeous, I love them. I've bookmarked the page so I can revisit them!

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  2. Great little collection of words.

    butterfly wings framed
    adorning white walls; pricking
    skin of conscience

    Is a particular favourite. I love the juxtaposition of beauty, sharpness and the clinical white walls.

    I'd give mine another read through. The choice of the word stitches is very deliberate.

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  3. the one with the framed butterfly wings made me sad...prefer them happy and alive..think my fav is the one with the red apples and black crows - speaks so bountifully of autumn and color and wind...lovely

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  4. A sumptuous collection here, dear. 'scattered on carved wooden feet' has to be my favorite line. Great visuals.
    Gene

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  5. Very nice, I liked them all but those first two I love, especially the first which i adore. Thanks, glad I had the opportunity to read each of these:)

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  6. You created excellent haiku here, Heaven. I think they are all exactly haiku, except "butterfly wings" seems to be a senryu. You make excellent juxtapositions in each - each compressed for a very complete set of images. Excellent work! Thank you.

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  7. These are beautiful haiku, Heaven! I particularly like the crows and the maple leaves. (Thanks for your kind comment on my offering, too.)

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  8. I love this: "rose scent stirring crypt"

    ~Shawna (iamthat-shawna.blogspot.com)

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  9. no no no early fall sad ending! Very good write.

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  10. These were beautiful--I think you may have a knack for haiku! I love frangipani--the word and the plant--used to have one in my yard.

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  11. I liked the second one...beautiful.

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  12. these Haikus are very moving.
    not sure what the carved wooden feet are, but as ''favors for the Gods'' it sounds Delicious.
    I like the image of the jasmines following the sun's trek across the sky in the 2nd Haiku.
    ''black crows all in rows'' absolutely lovely.
    the butterfly wings on walls pricking the conscience is revealing.
    early prognosis...the yellowing maple leaves falling upon the brim...
    all, very lovely and appreciated. good work.

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  13. 'early diagnosis' juxtaposes ~ moved ~
    pink franipani ~ 'wide brimmed hat' ~
    so many delicious images ~
    'black crows' ~ 'pock marked rosy apples'
    rich pickings all
    Lib

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  14. What colorful and gorgeous imagery. These are delicate and beautiful, Heaven :)

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