Sunday, January 20, 2013

Softened earth



you had me running  
lightning fast across fallen leaves -

weaved of copper and russet gold -
old woods heaved, washed of rain,
strains of birdsong and mating sounds - 
ground is softened earth,  
dearth of salt and sea breeze -

trees rustle as tongues meet,        
wheat-hued sky, bare throats - summer heat 




Posted for Imaginary Garden with Real Toads - Transforming Friday ~
and Sunday's Challenge - Chained Rhyme :   Poetry form:"Linked rhyme (or chained rhyme) chimes the last syllable or syllables of a line with the first syllable or syllables of the next line…" ~  Thanks for the visit ~

37 comments:

  1. really lovely Grace and love the pictures, are perfect!

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  2. Really like this rhyme pattern and I'm off to try my hand at it. Yours is very smooth and I didn't even realize WHY it worked so beautifully until I read the explanation.

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    1. Thank you Margaret ~ Was fun to do the challenge form ~

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  3. Beautiful, it conveys such a warm, golden summery feeling. Great job on the form and combining both prompts :)

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  4. Great imagery as you brought the warmth alive, can't wait for it to come and get rid of this stinkin snow.

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    1. Yes, we are snowed under ~ Thanks Pat for the visit ~

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  5. This is really excellent, Heaven--soft, inconspicuous and very natural the form seems at the tip of your pen. I imagine most readers might not even realize it was there--always the test of a good use of form, in my opinion. I love using the lizard qualities to represent sensuality, too--very creatively conceived, and neatly executed. Thanks for playing!

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    1. Thank you for the wonderful challenge form Hedgewitch ~

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  6. oo la la...love....the lightning in the leaves...the rustle at tongues touch....really cool use of nature in this...and nice sensuality as well....

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    1. Love the poetic response..la..la....Thanks Brian ~

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  7. Really nice Grace, it has a nice flow to it.

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  8. Mastery, here, Grace. Not only is the form respected, but the imagery and meaning is clear and relatable. Sexy and simultaneously sweet, this poem entwines nature, lust and humanity.

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    1. Thank you Kim ~ Was fun to entwine lust with nature ~

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  9. I ran with the little one in joy of the sun and the ground swollen with the detritus of seasons. I so love a warm throat while touching tongues!

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  10. This is absolutely beautiful! I love visiting here for my dose of romance.

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    1. Well I should write more about romance ~ Thanks Teresa ~

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  11. This is lovely writing. Your description brings the scene to life so vividly.

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  12. Yes, I can feel the heat. (The last of my water tanks ran dry onthe weekend.)

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    1. Too bad, I hate it when that happens ~ Thanks JCN~

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  13. Love how you combined two prompts so masterfully! The photos are great too!

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  14. Oh, lovely. I like the progression of seasons and pairing with the sensual.

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  15. You used the chain rhyme to perfection; and you created a beautiful scene with your words!

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  16. This is hot. So hot! And so welcome here where our -18 feels like -24 with the windchill.
    You have taken the form and made it your own, Grace.
    K

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  17. So beautiful grace...With your words I could see the small creature scurry across the leaves.

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  18. Wow! Silly me...I thought you were talking lizards here! ;-)

    Really lovely chained rhyme.

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  19. I just love what you did with this one, Grace...such a way with words!! ♥

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  20. You have done a wonderful poem with a challenging form,,,I love the sensual feeling building to your "summer heat",,,

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  21. This is such a beautiful poem and so very peaceful.

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  22. Almost makes me wish I was young enough to run through the forests again.

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  23. This was beautiful! Have a wonderful week.

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