tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4856662679041828863.post875955849225826663..comments2024-03-29T06:55:11.868-04:00Comments on everyday amazing: Frozen glass (2)Gracehttp://www.blogger.com/profile/02213172239590722747noreply@blogger.comBlogger19125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4856662679041828863.post-39583481760025072652018-08-06T15:04:07.065-04:002018-08-06T15:04:07.065-04:00Love how the punctuation works here
I wait..... n...Love how the punctuation works here<br /><br />I wait..... not for the thaw of snow <br />But for the << shattering >> <br /><br />instead of a calm and mellow demise, i feel the energy. <br /><br />Pat Rhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10802650408750617363noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4856662679041828863.post-44183109618708916702018-08-04T22:38:59.986-04:002018-08-04T22:38:59.986-04:00Your poem really moved me. I liked so much of th...Your poem really moved me. I liked so much of the imagery - the image of the wind riding a black pillar in particular. Suzanne from the Wordpress Blog - Being in Nature.Suzannehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17804913736651074714noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4856662679041828863.post-80935128738307761862018-08-04T16:15:37.286-04:002018-08-04T16:15:37.286-04:00The scars -- you carry never occurred
but in your...The scars -- you carry never occurred <br />but in your << heart << heart <<<br /><br />Love this. All of it is wickedly clever.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15990950149910900965noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4856662679041828863.post-32523721735848132752018-08-03T16:18:36.875-04:002018-08-03T16:18:36.875-04:00I feel a bit overwhelmed by the punctuation but th...I feel a bit overwhelmed by the punctuation but the //layers// of glass is clever!lynn__https://www.blogger.com/profile/03991892804149727665noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4856662679041828863.post-73741835796633594752018-08-03T15:25:02.365-04:002018-08-03T15:25:02.365-04:00I'm thinking if you write a peom with punctuat...I'm thinking if you write a peom with punctuation in the first place it belongs, but taking one that didn't and adding it sometimes changes it in a distracting way. I'm finding that out as I read everyone's work this week.<br /><br />I like your poem better the first time it's a wonderful poem either way. Love the descriptions!Bekkie Sanchezhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16300001421561443693noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4856662679041828863.post-63212904325042018702018-08-03T15:13:15.057-04:002018-08-03T15:13:15.057-04:00This is perfect. Love it.This is perfect. Love it.Miskyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10280369979543928659noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4856662679041828863.post-4942478493665930922018-08-03T14:04:22.981-04:002018-08-03T14:04:22.981-04:00The punctuation is interesting, and it gives the p...The punctuation is interesting, and it gives the poem a sort of jittery look--like a movie made with a handheld camera. I think I prefer the first version though.Merril D. Smithhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07208799388236948565noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4856662679041828863.post-15555155616828058422018-08-03T05:00:51.298-04:002018-08-03T05:00:51.298-04:00The various tools used (punctuation etc.) give a v...The various tools used (punctuation etc.) give a very visual and live performance of this poem.Dr. Vandana Sharmahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07812039483229217149noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4856662679041828863.post-35685105533487019212018-08-03T02:36:07.359-04:002018-08-03T02:36:07.359-04:00I went back and read the original, and was intrigu...I went back and read the original, and was intrigued by the contrast. I like the poem very much, for a start. The punctuation made it more of a visual event - I almost felt you needed a different font or format to really make it explode off the page- but I also liked just being able to concentrate on the words and the meaning. I'm getting more and more interested in how a poem sounds, and you can't pronounce brackets (!) so you gain visually but maybe lose auditorily. Which isn't a word, I don't think, but I can't think of another one. sarahhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01756314170839177900noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4856662679041828863.post-6318332941607376792018-08-02T23:15:03.589-04:002018-08-02T23:15:03.589-04:00You played with brackets and more eloquently! Love...You played with brackets and more eloquently! Love thisA Reading Writerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12229414372642627877noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4856662679041828863.post-41198382712354571862018-08-02T20:43:20.375-04:002018-08-02T20:43:20.375-04:00I love the scars only carried in the heart! Amazin...I love the scars only carried in the heart! Amazing how much baggage we pile upon ourselves.Dwight L. Rothhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07992133580674047782noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4856662679041828863.post-26871102470907479542018-08-02T18:53:50.566-04:002018-08-02T18:53:50.566-04:00I love these lines;
"wrapping [dead things] ...I love these lines;<br /><br />"wrapping [dead things] in resin &<br /> //layers of glass//<br />johttps://jowrites.aylard.ca/index.php/where-we-gonoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4856662679041828863.post-34431330223862207182018-08-02T18:50:57.290-04:002018-08-02T18:50:57.290-04:00I like the punctuation around ">nebula of ...I like the punctuation around ">nebula of darkness<". It seems to push one into oneself even more.<br />Frank Hubenyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18058591172624203875noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4856662679041828863.post-49446698254247376412018-08-02T17:14:31.962-04:002018-08-02T17:14:31.962-04:00The punctuation sure gives it a new spin indeed. The punctuation sure gives it a new spin indeed. Pat Hatthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07745293224202430152noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4856662679041828863.post-39767880826315902602018-08-02T16:24:42.689-04:002018-08-02T16:24:42.689-04:00You had me at /Wind rides a black pillar this nigh...You had me at /Wind rides a black pillar this night/. You rocked the be-jesus out of the prompt for sure. I think there is a poetic form that uses odd break and overripe brackets and such. I, too, like the way the words look on a page. I play with that a lot in my own stuff.Glenn Buttkushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10680725814199700692noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4856662679041828863.post-88632541653978237912018-08-02T15:25:16.108-04:002018-08-02T15:25:16.108-04:00Oh, you have so punctuated this poem, Grace! I lov...Oh, you have so punctuated this poem, Grace! I love the way it looks and sounds with the hyphens and different kinds of brackets - I can see that ice chandelier dripping dry ice and the moon hiding fat cheeks. I love '//layers// of glass' both as a metaphor and as stylistic typography!Kim M. Russellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16668459794787447606noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4856662679041828863.post-82661320273150914672018-08-02T15:22:02.791-04:002018-08-02T15:22:02.791-04:00I'm going to be brutally honest and say that I...I'm going to be brutally honest and say that I very much like the original poem, and the rework doesn't add anything for me. I find the extra punctuation distracting and unnecessary. Rather than helping the rhythm it breaks it. Love the poem, hate the punctuation :)Jane Doughertyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14700193165487305298noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4856662679041828863.post-57671977898241839182018-08-02T15:12:32.921-04:002018-08-02T15:12:32.921-04:00This was written during winter, smiles!This was written during winter, smiles!Gracehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02213172239590722747noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4856662679041828863.post-47739911971668817932018-08-02T15:06:24.609-04:002018-08-02T15:06:24.609-04:00I do love the rework of the poem... but it does fe...I do love the rework of the poem... but it does feel strange to see the ice during the heatwave **smiles** <br /><br />The use of the brackets does enhance the rhythm of the poetry and I like how it looks on the page.brudberghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12563403553536472377noreply@blogger.com