tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4856662679041828863.post626627804964939966..comments2024-03-27T22:12:01.201-04:00Comments on everyday amazing: What the sign said: Pennies are ok! Gracehttp://www.blogger.com/profile/02213172239590722747noreply@blogger.comBlogger35125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4856662679041828863.post-44515662054613297422013-07-20T09:46:35.883-04:002013-07-20T09:46:35.883-04:00Well depicted - eden lost for sure. Too bad. k. (...Well depicted - eden lost for sure. Too bad. k. (Manicddaily) Outlawyerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15698845661756444061noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4856662679041828863.post-32491725220574253082013-07-20T01:31:43.931-04:002013-07-20T01:31:43.931-04:00Sad.Sad.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4856662679041828863.post-9301285561574591242013-07-19T20:38:05.576-04:002013-07-19T20:38:05.576-04:00Intelligent use of refrain.. and it is an intense ...Intelligent use of refrain.. and it is an intense creation. And one more thing- impressive imagery.. :-)Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4856662679041828863.post-9467592033090242362013-07-19T19:10:42.762-04:002013-07-19T19:10:42.762-04:00A powerful depiction of lost youth--your refrain i...A powerful depiction of lost youth--your refrain is spot-on, with the last line emphasizing the cold, lonely onset of night. Very well done.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4856662679041828863.post-64267916936456367502013-07-19T14:42:11.227-04:002013-07-19T14:42:11.227-04:00I love these lines:
"Like swept up shells in ...I love these lines:<br />"Like swept up shells in grainy shores<br />Gutted by wind & bitten by <br /><br />Uncertainty for tomorrow"<br /><br />What a great turn of phrase, Grace! Lovely. And gorgeous photos too. Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4856662679041828863.post-7844617983678640792013-07-19T11:43:37.831-04:002013-07-19T11:43:37.831-04:00You executed this form to perfection, Grace. I lov...You executed this form to perfection, Grace. I love the weave of the repeated lines. Impactful, your line about their lost Eden.Sherry Blue Skyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10769154286598233146noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4856662679041828863.post-80257174635832753192013-07-19T10:26:52.432-04:002013-07-19T10:26:52.432-04:00Grace, this is not the Canada I remember…in advers...Grace, this is not the Canada I remember…in adversity, it is great comfort to huddle CLOSER together.ninotazizhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06491437553562159354noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4856662679041828863.post-59849147143902589752013-07-19T06:44:34.570-04:002013-07-19T06:44:34.570-04:00their drug & eden (lost) -- Brilliant, but the... their drug & eden (lost) -- Brilliant, but the poem had me as a fan long before that!Dave Kinghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08430484174826768488noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4856662679041828863.post-91847516728951663292013-07-19T00:43:12.543-04:002013-07-19T00:43:12.543-04:00You really captured their sad situation well... li...You really captured their sad situation well... like swept up shells in grainy shores... so descriptive. I feel all the elements and the picture comes across so vividly. Wonderful poem. :)Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4856662679041828863.post-8980913068735120492013-07-18T23:21:11.493-04:002013-07-18T23:21:11.493-04:00A powerful poem--the refrain works well--unobtrusi...A powerful poem--the refrain works well--unobtrusive as it fits so nicely in all the stanzas--excellent imagery here as I can see the people you are describing--you've put me at the scene.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4856662679041828863.post-17741706613574878332013-07-18T22:31:44.893-04:002013-07-18T22:31:44.893-04:00Really enjoyed this poem!! Quite a story here!! :-...Really enjoyed this poem!! Quite a story here!! :-)Kate Solohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06703901149715024366noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4856662679041828863.post-28457938928855120792013-07-18T19:40:09.423-04:002013-07-18T19:40:09.423-04:00A fascinating piece, Grace. The recurring refrain ...A fascinating piece, Grace. The recurring refrain gives it a "blues" feel - audibly breaking the stanzas into different line lengths. The reference to the clock makes it a bit steampunk, time-travelly. The quatern fades from being a set form to merely a foundation for your vivid portrayal of people at the beach in beautiful Vancouver, B.C. I know you're enjoying it.Beachannyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08638256396472533685noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4856662679041828863.post-23570709551008908812013-07-18T18:59:59.420-04:002013-07-18T18:59:59.420-04:00This is a nicely written poem, I enjoyed reading t...This is a nicely written poem, I enjoyed reading this.<br /><br />www.modernworld4.blogspot.comGina Gaohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09032273127593718883noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4856662679041828863.post-8021304782531478852013-07-18T18:16:46.339-04:002013-07-18T18:16:46.339-04:00Well done Grace...I felt my heart break a little f...Well done Grace...I felt my heart break a little for them.Jennifer Wagnerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04344877737695801883noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4856662679041828863.post-50659345652327792013-07-18T18:09:30.453-04:002013-07-18T18:09:30.453-04:00Huddled close as weary trees after a storm--accura...Huddled close as weary trees after a storm--accurate and vivid simile. Sometimes Eden turns out to be not so pleasant. Great work here!Jeffhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10858791213787473858noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4856662679041828863.post-77192620512537688972013-07-18T18:06:52.183-04:002013-07-18T18:06:52.183-04:00I so respect these higher forms of poetry which yo...I so respect these higher forms of poetry which you wrote so beautifully, Grace. You paint a clear and sad picture of that little piece of world you noticed.Maggie Gracehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13044824920398442496noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4856662679041828863.post-24193530439116940332013-07-18T17:39:33.125-04:002013-07-18T17:39:33.125-04:00Grace, you captured interesting scene,youngsters,w...Grace, you captured interesting scene,youngsters,who physically could work...let's hope their difficulty - temporary one.... ths for sharing humbirdhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00106270909713851811noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4856662679041828863.post-50258835661395490782013-07-18T17:15:57.482-04:002013-07-18T17:15:57.482-04:00Beautiful, Grace. Mine is about the beach, too... ...Beautiful, Grace. Mine is about the beach, too... but quite different. ;)Laurie Kolphttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07494759781947881343noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4856662679041828863.post-28372753761719121802013-07-18T17:14:09.926-04:002013-07-18T17:14:09.926-04:00... so much like the gulls... so much like the gullsWolfsrosebudhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17295258422523621134noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4856662679041828863.post-7657684597891777772013-07-18T16:27:24.320-04:002013-07-18T16:27:24.320-04:00Good Write.>KBGood Write.>KBAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4856662679041828863.post-43484855344899790552013-07-18T16:09:09.154-04:002013-07-18T16:09:09.154-04:00You really pulled off the prompts with panache; ho...You really pulled off the prompts with panache; homeless folks, able-bodied but not able-minded always freak out the "dealwithit" voices in my right brain. Like Brian, I do feel they all have a story, and heartbreak awaits the tellings. Just spent over a week coming & going through BC on way to, and return from Alaska. We love Barkerville, Ft. Steele, & Revelstoke. When I lived in Seattle, I used to weekend in Vancouver, which seemed exotic and cleaner than Seattle to me. Glenn Buttkushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10680725814199700692noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4856662679041828863.post-64854059046343410502013-07-18T15:39:10.274-04:002013-07-18T15:39:10.274-04:00Oh, sad, and somehow you have made this beautiful ...Oh, sad, and somehow you have made this beautiful at the same time. Susan Danielshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13241514922366571247noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4856662679041828863.post-86120684129022966382013-07-18T15:30:06.601-04:002013-07-18T15:30:06.601-04:00Quatrains are among my tied favourite forms...love...Quatrains are among my tied favourite forms...love this Grace, could very much see them huddled.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4856662679041828863.post-17992133333377028882013-07-18T15:20:30.699-04:002013-07-18T15:20:30.699-04:00As weary trees after a storm....just this one line...As weary trees after a storm....just this one line would've been totally enough to really make me see them...Claudiahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03011763027311966186noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4856662679041828863.post-51400359115611472962013-07-18T15:19:59.656-04:002013-07-18T15:19:59.656-04:00Nicely done, Grace. The reality of homelessness ha...Nicely done, Grace. The reality of homelessness haunts me. My 2nd novel dips into it. Vancouver City is so beautiful. I would love to visit again. I would love to take a driving trip through your beautiful country, in fact, but my husband doesn't like to drive. I love it, but he's an insufferable backseat driver. It could signal the end of a good thing. :0)Anonymousnoreply@blogger.com