tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4856662679041828863.post6990421058490081007..comments2024-03-27T22:12:01.201-04:00Comments on everyday amazing: Mixed SignalsGracehttp://www.blogger.com/profile/02213172239590722747noreply@blogger.comBlogger31125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4856662679041828863.post-74130703009635183572017-06-19T07:48:34.038-04:002017-06-19T07:48:34.038-04:00Such a delightful piece, each line elevates the ot...Such a delightful piece, each line elevates the other. Greetings!Blogorattihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12821621371176285384noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4856662679041828863.post-78632046436755623302017-06-17T23:42:28.944-04:002017-06-17T23:42:28.944-04:00I liked this phrase: "Creeks nurse oceans&quo...I liked this phrase: "Creeks nurse oceans" And it seems to go with seeds growing into trees.Frank Hubenyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18058591172624203875noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4856662679041828863.post-46334059153133803292017-06-17T12:08:40.683-04:002017-06-17T12:08:40.683-04:00Beautiful images and sound.Beautiful images and sound.Sascha Darlingtonhttps://saschadarlington.menoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4856662679041828863.post-8937571132163836802017-06-17T07:01:22.089-04:002017-06-17T07:01:22.089-04:00Collided in needles and brine,
mismatched signals...Collided in needles and brine, <br />mismatched signals from old phone line<br /><br />Amazing how conversations can turn out cold on some!<br /><br />Hankkaykualahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03240206222973305395noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4856662679041828863.post-3011686445196210732017-06-17T00:46:25.122-04:002017-06-17T00:46:25.122-04:00"...We ignite heat / birthing stars, milky pi..."...We ignite heat / birthing stars, milky pink...". Really beautiful!Sarah Russellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06548593069470592148noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4856662679041828863.post-13319284160289737312017-06-16T17:02:49.925-04:002017-06-16T17:02:49.925-04:00Wonderful snatches of evocative metaphors that bui...Wonderful snatches of evocative metaphors that build to that powerful close. Brilliant writing! Wendy Bourkehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09475940407969993348noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4856662679041828863.post-60428114167522661232017-06-16T12:19:40.387-04:002017-06-16T12:19:40.387-04:00Lovely, Grace... this mismatched life we live with...Lovely, Grace... this mismatched life we live with our 'significant' others....the back and forth of this is captivating. Lady NyoAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4856662679041828863.post-75140906211855682692017-06-16T03:50:28.672-04:002017-06-16T03:50:28.672-04:00I think the format of this was based on the first ...I think the format of this was based on the first poem by Carol Ann Duffy. The disconnect is evident in almost any given conversation. Petru J Viljoenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04821468855056711841noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4856662679041828863.post-21419284071623901692017-06-16T00:54:03.350-04:002017-06-16T00:54:03.350-04:00Ah, when that plan doesn't go along the expect...Ah, when that plan doesn't go along the expected lines, we realize the distinguishing and disconnecting factors. This is so beautifully penned - the images say it all, from moon shroud and silver dress to needles and brine - well crafted.<br />-HAAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4856662679041828863.post-88982388682799388592017-06-15T22:28:46.416-04:002017-06-15T22:28:46.416-04:00Whoa!
ZQWhoa!<br />ZQZQhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08521836993023109556noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4856662679041828863.post-13526393811621875612017-06-15T21:37:42.160-04:002017-06-15T21:37:42.160-04:00Sage clouds - what a great bit of imagery and symb...Sage clouds - what a great bit of imagery and symbolism!Jillyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14971432705586726610noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4856662679041828863.post-43945238511495526382017-06-15T20:49:53.485-04:002017-06-15T20:49:53.485-04:00Ouch--needles and brine! A beautifully woven poem...Ouch--needles and brine! A beautifully woven poem.Jennifer Wagnerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04344877737695801883noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4856662679041828863.post-34815566359184027692017-06-15T20:37:54.108-04:002017-06-15T20:37:54.108-04:00What a wonderful poem of missed connections, misun...What a wonderful poem of missed connections, misunderstood conversations. I love the last two lines - Gorgeous.tonispencerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04200564195675794747noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4856662679041828863.post-30667723177145844272017-06-15T20:32:02.320-04:002017-06-15T20:32:02.320-04:00Such images then the realization and to take us in...Such images then the realization and to take us in.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4856662679041828863.post-38225584952678510912017-06-15T20:00:44.071-04:002017-06-15T20:00:44.071-04:00Amazing how attraction can turn to friction. Felt ...Amazing how attraction can turn to friction. Felt the emotion in this. Something you do well at.Wolfsrosebudhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17295258422523621134noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4856662679041828863.post-8945022373336165882017-06-15T19:40:04.314-04:002017-06-15T19:40:04.314-04:00This poem is something special. I'm feeling it...This poem is something special. I'm feeling it. "Seeds worm to trees, Creeks nurse oceans," so good. Nosainthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05807730653175525468noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4856662679041828863.post-3930780916293148482017-06-15T19:14:06.838-04:002017-06-15T19:14:06.838-04:00"This was the plan
But reality is, our words ..."This was the plan<br />But reality is, our words <br /><br />Collided in needles and brine, <br />mismatched signals from old phone line"<br /><br />Economy of words provided an abundance of emotional tension. Truly masterful.Charleyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08662221501459533188noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4856662679041828863.post-80756091382513075892017-06-15T18:47:42.608-04:002017-06-15T18:47:42.608-04:00This is everything I need: "You soak coffee c...This is everything I need: "You soak coffee cherries"✿https://www.blogger.com/profile/01044032159371976375noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4856662679041828863.post-75234613379533634302017-06-15T18:42:27.194-04:002017-06-15T18:42:27.194-04:00So much said in so few lines; something you have m...So much said in so few lines; something you have mastered so well. The rhyme scheme is creative & not distracting, the message inc clarion. Miscommunication was the culprit in my first two marriages.Glenn Buttkushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10680725814199700692noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4856662679041828863.post-33508220763089568322017-06-15T17:48:55.274-04:002017-06-15T17:48:55.274-04:00The last two stanzas really bring it home. Wonderf...The last two stanzas really bring it home. Wonderful work, Grace! <br />Charlottehttp://zouxzoux.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4856662679041828863.post-89852681179386144742017-06-15T17:45:35.271-04:002017-06-15T17:45:35.271-04:00Ages-old theme of mismatched miscommunication writ...Ages-old theme of mismatched miscommunication written with fresh phrases...good one, Grace.lynn__https://www.blogger.com/profile/03991892804149727665noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4856662679041828863.post-5626174749416016232017-06-15T17:06:12.158-04:002017-06-15T17:06:12.158-04:00Brilliant use of conflict built in both images and...Brilliant use of conflict built in both images and sounds of the words used. Excellent.Beachannyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08638256396472533685noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4856662679041828863.post-63510666500012819422017-06-15T16:35:35.218-04:002017-06-15T16:35:35.218-04:00seeds worming to trees is a lovely vivid image!seeds worming to trees is a lovely vivid image!Jane Doughertyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14700193165487305298noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4856662679041828863.post-1459980777574908882017-06-15T16:27:24.393-04:002017-06-15T16:27:24.393-04:00Although the number and length of the lines are qu...Although the number and length of the lines are quite different from a sonnet, there is a sonnet-like feel to this, perhaps because of that 'turn'from This was our plan but...Marina Sofiahttp://findingtimetowrite.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4856662679041828863.post-10406784214002050252017-06-15T16:24:27.950-04:002017-06-15T16:24:27.950-04:00"seeds worm to trees
creeks nurse oceans"..."seeds worm to trees<br />creeks nurse oceans" - i love the movement in this couplet, the unexpected twist of it. sarahhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01756314170839177900noreply@blogger.com