Monday, January 30, 2017

Take one: a free map


this darkness will pass, sudden rain storm- 
let's ride out, you and i    

where dawn is a well  
we're freely drawing with icy breath
see light chattering, 
piercing

through winter fog- 
filling pockets, trunks, buckets full-

let's link hands, ink-pressed with map of stars







Posted for D'verse Poets Pub - Hosted by Bjorn Rudberg - Quadrille - 44 word post with the word DAWN.  Thanks for the visit. 

34 comments:

  1. Link on up one by one, an alignment to all

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  2. LOVE LOVE LOVE that last line! Dawn as a well...reach deep and it shall give you warmth and love...
    ink-pressed with map of stars....such a beautiful image! :)

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  3. I love this hopeful poem... we need to wait for dawn... but it's always darkest right before.

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  4. I love this Grace 'let's ride out, you and i where dawn is a well' and 'let's link hands, ink-pressed with map of stars' - truly beautiful! :o)

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  5. A refreshing piece, like the early morning dew against the skin.

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  6. Delightful connections here. Very uplifting.

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  7. I like the image you create with 'dawn is a well' there's hope there and our map of stars...beautiful.

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  8. Hope springs inexorably in your breast it seems; lovely quadrille. Yes, your last line is killer. I like the lines /see light chattering/piercing/.

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  9. Oh that last line. Just beautiful finish to a wonderful poem.

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  10. I really like your title and the whole idea of a free map. "Where dawn is a well" and the idea of filling everything you can with it. <3

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  11. Just loved the ending... this needs to be read more than once

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  12. Love, really love this Grace, beauty!

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  13. love the image of light chattering..just beautiful.

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  14. I liked the idea of a map of stars on the couple's linked hands.

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  15. Words of lovers; Where there's always light

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  16. I love the invitation to take a free map, which hooked me immediately, and the idea of dawn as a well where you can draw different kinds of weather. I love the pace of the poem, which leaves the reader breathless until that final invitation:

    'let's link hands, ink-pressed with map of stars'

    How could anyone refuse?

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  17. Oh wow!!! I soooo love this part,

    "let's link hands, ink-pressed with map of stars"

    <3

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  18. The imagery is flawless Grace. Though old men like me are burdened for need of a heavy coat in the chill dawn.

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  19. let's link hands, ink-pressed with map of stars... oh yes!!❤️ Beautiful, beautiful work, Grace!

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  20. Love the light chattering...like even the sun is cold.

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  21. Absolutely beautiful, Grace. Has to be one of my favorites of yours. This speaks so much to love. Jane

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  22. This fits well with the cold weather we've been having, but with a hint of hope for the dawn to come. Very nice.

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  23. This leaves me beautifully breathless:
    "where dawn is a well
    we're freely drawing with icy breath"

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  24. Stunning imagery, Grace. Such a visual read! Love it!

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  25. I too love the last lone here Grace--just gorgeeous

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  26. STarry eYes oF NiGht
    iCe FiLLeD cOld
    BreaThe..
    FaLL SpRinG
    LEaves riSe..
    FeaT
    UnFOlds..
    EmoTioN
    DancE SenSes
    SinG SoNG aLiVe..
    DAwn WiNds
    SuMmEr
    BreeZe..
    Winter
    GoNe
    wArm..
    HeARt FiRe
    gRows aLiVe..:)

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  27. where dawn is a well
    we're freely drawing with icy breath
    see light chattering,
    piercing

    a stunning stanza - breath taking - beautiful

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