Monday, October 10, 2016

Autumn flight



sky is sun-shrouded
as birds rustle above trees

rib me not, in cotton nor fur
cool air is light on my brows

cloud me not, in rain nor fog
i'll climb until i fall

with rust-orange hues
embracing distance

between certainty 
& red river








Posted for D'verse Poets Pub - Quadrille - a 44 word post with the word - CLOUD.   Hosted by Kim M. Russell ~  Happy Thanks giving to my Canadian friends ~  We are having a cool sun-dappled autumn day !

26 comments:

  1. Sure a sight to behold, have to watch that certainty. Hope a great day is had at your pad.

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  2. Colorful autumn at our doorstep.😀

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  3. Colorful autumn at our doorstep.😀

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  4. ... had first snow here in AB ... trees are bare ... looks like we are in for a looong winter, friend Grace ... Love, cat,

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  5. Such a wonder... and so many of the same words we used apart from the cloud. Yours come out bright and filled with hope though

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  6. You've captured such a sense of the season, Grace...a moody season that seems to vascillate between colorful and gray. Have a wonderful Thanksgiving.

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  7. Your autumn poem has such a fresh feel to it, Grace, with the 'cool air light on my brows'. The oxymoron 'sun-shrouded' is effective - autumn sun is so different to summer sun - lower in the sky and muted. And then there's that final flare of colour - fabulous!

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  8. Oh I love the various moods which this poem evokes ❤️ especially "rust-orange hues embracing distance between certainty & red river" is so elegant an image.❤️ Beautifully executed.

    Lots of love,
    Sanaa

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  9. I love this unique opening line: "sky is sun-shrouded." We so often think of clouds or darkness as shrouding the sky, not the sun, but the thought of this made me smile.

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  10. The photo exquisite with rust-orange hues against a clear crisp blue autumn sky. "Sun shrouded sky" really gives the mood of autumn to me -- it reminds me of the days shortening -sun shrouded.
    I enjoyed this very much!

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  11. Your closing lines are killer, & I like the way your truncated sentences give it an Oriental--tanka feel. Autumn is coming in stealth-fully here in WA state, but have had no frost yet--soon, soon, quoth the crow.

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  12. Delightful prose, imaginative and colourful. Autumnal beauty.

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  13. This poem shines...brilliant as accompanying photo!

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  14. A whimsical dressing of colors and air.

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  15. Well sung. Now is the time for reality to meet the river of dreams

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  16. I like the idea of climbing until one falls.

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  17. Gayle Walters RoseOctober 10, 2016 at 8:53 PM

    Happy Thanksgiving, Grace. I guess the temperatures are yet such that you have to bundle up I suppose. I do love the brilliant colors of fall but have to go visit them up north to see them. A beautiful piece of autumn.

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  18. LOVE the voice in "rib me not" and "cloud me not." Wonderful.

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  19. Aww.. I envy your lovely weather. We have heavy rains here. Beautiful piece, Grace. :)

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  20. oh woooow. geez. the rib me not and cloud me not is epic!! great!

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  21. The time of year for counting the fallen is upon us--do we stop counting when the falling is not so pretty?

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  22. A light airy feel-like being able to take flight on this sun-shrouded day.

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  23. I like the playful and whimsical vibe of your piece. "Rib me not", "Cloud me not" - those phrases sound so good.

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  24. SMiLes.. most
    only colored leaves
    are tans of sKin sTiLL
    in Florida sun so far away from shades
    of
    pasty
    white..;)

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  25. i love your colorful river and sky. wonderful imagery.

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  26. cloud me not, in rain nor fog
    i'll climb until i fall

    This speaks to me about continuing in the journey until I can no longer do so...

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