Monday, September 5, 2016

Haibun: Night sky




The sky is deep lavender, wrinkled by red dust and orange stars.   We scout and trace the fireflies hiding behind the palm trees.   All the windows are open, and we can hear the last echoes of the dinner's conversations.   Soon, all is quiet murmuring of breeze, and even the buzzing creatures wait for the evening show.   Yes, here it is -  the moon rise above the heaving sea tides.   Red and yellow trenches, plump with silver iridescence.   Your gaze is filled with wonder at the sight.    I look at you, my heart racing in excitement.   Words tremble at the tip of my tongue.


green apples on grass
mulched & decayed by bugs-
summer, a quicksilver




Posted for D'verse Poets Pub - Haibun Monday is hosted by Kanzensakura (Toni).   I am out in the afternoon for a family reunion but will be back to visit and comment.  Thanks for the visit!

30 comments:

  1. I like how you take the wonderful night with its richness of color and project it on the wonderful love story in the end... and the haiku giving an excellent contrast... wonderful

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  2. This is so beautiful, Grace. I especially like the opening.

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  3. Yes it is a wonderful haibun. And the haiku is exquisite.

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  4. The haiku is, as Toni said, exquisite.

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  5. An evening like that sure isn't bad to come due as all of nature is ready to view

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  6. What a beautiful scene you set and I love that last line of the haiku...summer, a quicksilver...

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  7. This is a beautifully written haibun - the prose and haiku dovetail so well together. A pleasure to read. The piece simply bursts with color and life: I am there.

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  8. Beautiful imagery in a lovely haibun.

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  9. visually gorgeous, Grace! a delight to read! <3

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  10. Fire fly
    eYes stars
    wings
    see
    memories
    humans noW
    love lit candles
    wonders magic..

    Stars
    Fire Fly
    sKeYes..:)

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  11. wow...such riot of colors...so beautiful Grace...

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  12. Smell the sea and witness the creatures turning to the moon, as do the lovers. A detailed scene filled with tactile memories.

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  13. I love the way you start with colour, shift focus to the sounds of the dinner conversation and then the sounds of the garden, and then finally focus on the moon and romance, crowned by the haiku: 'summer, a quicksilver'. Gorgeous!

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  14. beautiful moment expressed.

    gracias for sharing

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  15. The contrasts in the Hiabun come clear at the end of the haiku--interesting changes.

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  16. Oh wow, Grace. I love how you play with the colors and images of the breeze and tides at night. My heart stopped waiting for those trembling words... Beautifully done. <3

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  17. This is a perfect haibun. It moved, grabbed me, immediately. Clear, the vision in this haibun was lovely.

    Jane (Lady Nyo)

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  18. There is so much wonder in this haibun. I especially love the use of the word "plump." And the haiku -- the shift to the apple and the quick silver of summer. Wonderful!

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  19. I love that descriptive first line...and, of course, the haibun. A neighbor's apple tree "blesses" our yard and every day I try to pick some spoiled fruit up before the dogs get it. Autumn is in the air.

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  20. "summer, a quicksilver" Oh, THIS.

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  21. I love the colors of the sky. It's like something no painter can perfect. Amazing what nature can do.

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  22. Yes, here it is -
    the moon rise above
    the heaving sea tides

    One can almost see and feel the heave and pull tirelessly of the waves in lapping the shore!

    Hank

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  23. The color and light is stunning, Grace! First phrase of prose and last phrase of "ku" wrap your haibun perfectly.

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  24. Nicely woven story using the elements and richness of life therein.

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  25. You paint such a rich picture. Thank for sharing that beauty with us. Have a wonderful weekend.

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