Thursday, September 22, 2016

Feathers from different folks

I.

sun is a harsh pillar of salt
while the moon is a white cross
you bear between faint heartbeats
& featherless shoulders

II.

scars on where your breasts
were are red still, but you are regal
a queen with baby hair
needing no peacock feathers 


III.

hope is a bubble 
without feathers, soaring with sea-
gulls, light as tumbleweed


IV.

your touch is feather 
as you kneel down with a ring-
my heart, a river of joy
as sun drips, slow as candle wax
the golden light, warm as honey    




Posted for D'verse Poets Pub- It's OpenLinkNight.   Join us when the pub opens at 3pm EST. A "feathery" post for the Poetics I missed last Tuesday.  

27 comments:

  1. III is powerful, wonderful. I love this one best of all the poems you have listed here.

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  2. So touching & a bit mysterious, this piece shines. It is written in the style that Bjhorn used today--which I'm digging. We need to use it for FFA one day.

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  3. No. 2 was particularly touching to me. It reminded me of my mother, whose birthday is today, and who had a mastectomy when she had breast cancer. I remember seeing her scar once. Just thinking of it now makes me want to cry for her.

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  4. Oh I love this, we seem to be having similar ideas here.. The feather telling different stories, all have their own aspect of love, pain and recovery. Number 2 is so touching.

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  5. Effective style for your theme and verse IV. is softly tender. III. is a fresh view of hope, different than Emily Dickinson's, "Hope is the thing with feathers"...

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  6. I like how each is different yet leads ever on to new beginnings and hope.

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  7. You and Bjorn seem to be on the same wavelength. I love the whole poem but my favourite lines are:
    'hope is a bubble
    without feathers, soaring with sea-
    gulls, light as tumbleweed'

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  8. Oh my word, IV made me drool. Gorgeous!!!

    I also love this:
    "while the moon is a white cross
    you bear between faint heartbeats
    & featherless shoulders"

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  9. I'm a bit confused about this ... feathers symbolize freedom of flying to where ever you want to be ... feathers also can be used to make life here on earth a bit more flashy and give you the illusion of being someone you actually not are, especially when they are someone else's feathers, friend Grace ... Love, cat.

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  10. So glad you wrote this poem using the feather theme, Grace. I am enjoying the many facets of feathered beauty.

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  11. All are beautiful but 2 really moves me.

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  12. Hope in each one before it is done. The last is sure joyous too.

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  13. What absoolutely lovely poem Grace xoxox

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  14. moon is a white cross
    you bear between faint heartbeats
    & featherless shoulders
    ...love that!

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  15. Very feathery indeed but each so unique. I love the idea of hope as a bubble without feathers as it describes so well the trust we must have in it's power.

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  16. no.2 reminds me of a Princess..sad & tragic...love no.4, sweet :)

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  17. Lovely in its entirety. And the way you used these words...!

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  18. Very consistent flow through the four intricately dancing stanzas Grace. I leads to IV which equals the result of surviving and hope.

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  19. Life..
    A
    feather
    tOuch..
    A place
    with little
    helm control..
    Force A feather into
    heLm.. float siNks as
    concrete quills...Spill..:)

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  20. A beautiful, wonderfully crafted piece. Lovely, emotive words: delicate and exquisite.

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  21. how sweet ,written so beautifully you painted the precious moment so well

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  22. Beautiful and as Glenn said, mysterious. I've read and re-read, and taken different things from it each time.

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  23. What an amazing transition from beginning to end. The contrasting first and last stanzas really stood out. What a way to capture sun!

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  24. This is beautiful, poignant and uplifting all at the same time. Happy week ahead, Grace. :-)

    ~Imelda

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  25. Beautiful Grace, delicately and masterfully done.

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