Saturday, August 16, 2014

Two triquian


Wind

These pages
unravel a knot, blue
storm underneath ink & silver lines.
I tether on metal, waiting for perfect sage
to point me my journey, foot by foot
But all I hear is wind
lion-maned.






August Sky

colorless
clouds dust my skin opaque 
chattering endlessly until i 
hush them to slide into moonlight arabesques. 
cold snaps last summer blooms as i write
away.  words, they keep me 
from drowning.


Posted for Imaginary Garden for Real Toads - Sunday's mini-challenge - Triquain
Seven line poem with the following syllables: 3 - 6 - 9 - 12 - 9 - 6 - 3

40 comments:

  1. Dear Grace
    You are a very skilled and sensitive observer.
    Lovely picture and words by you -are so fine and thoughtful!

    Hugs
    Jette Majken

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  2. oh yes - words keep me from drowning as well sometimes... i love the lion-maned wind...what a great image...

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  3. Both are gorgeous, Grace! So evocative of seasons change and a ward against melancholy. Beautiful word choices and lasting images.

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  4. Wanted: a perfect sage and a life guard. Located: within. How wonderful to locate the self in space and not only the inner resources ...great images.

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  5. moonlight arabesque.. love that language.. and those are just the type of words that keep me afloat.. thank you Grace -- and have a great weekend

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  6. I love both of these but I think the second is my favorite. You did great with this form, I've been struggling with it and not come up with anything decent yet.

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  7. "wind, lion-maned" is such a glorious line.......I love "words, they keep me from drowning." Me, too.

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  8. Hi Grace! Love these--especially Wind--sand is an inspiration for me today!

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  9. Oh, now I will see and feel 'lion-maned' wind for while...and how you're powerful with clouds - I just love to 'hush them' in my kind music arabesque though :)xx ~ Glad you back, happy weekend, Grace xx

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  10. Keep on writing and you shall stay afloat

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  11. love the sketch of images of power and beauty..and "words, they keep me
    from drowning" what is truer than that?...

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  12. You write so beautiful Grace! :-) Gorgeous they are!

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  13. This reminds we of a sorbet or water ice, meant for
    palate cleansing during a sumptuous, multi-course French meal between overly rich courses..

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  14. Both of these are beautiful and words that drown are delightful.

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  15. It is good to have words to keep one from drowning! Happy Sunday to you, Grace.

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  16. I love the image of the lion-maned wind, as well as the visuals of your first poem.

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  17. Geesh, well done, and with art!
    ZQ

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  18. A lovely form I will have to give this a go..I enjoyed both pieces and I am afraid fall is coming much too soon.

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  19. Hey Grace--both are lovely--agh! Cold too fast--sages best found in pages! k.

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  20. The timbre to this is magical. And words keep me from drowning too.

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  21. You have a wonderful way of weaving images with your words. I don't mind drowning in them.

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  22. What a lovely form, Grace, symmetrical & soothing. I like the imagery of the change in seasons, a bit too soon for me ~ I don't want summer to end. Beautifully written :)

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  23. words, they keep me
    from drowning.

    Very true Grace! When writer's block permeates one sigh with relief when words come back to counter. Wonderful write!

    Hank

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  24. Words have often kept me from drowning. I feel like I know the storm beneath the ink all too well. A lovely pair of triquian.

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  25. Two beautiful pieces - colorful and colorless. Warm and windy brisk and biting

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  26. I love the lion-maned wind...and initially thought I liked the first one best...but both are so beautifully done I can't decide.

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  27. Words are certainly life savers in difficult times

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  28. There is something calming about not having figures in a landscape whether it be a photograph, painting or words themselves. Perhaps we ourselves take the beauty out of the world.

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  29. These are so beautiful Grace..You seem to have mastered the form superbly.

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  30. truly beautiful, Grace, and so easy to relate. i'm chilly now, actually we've had a chilly summer and i haven't warmed, so wrapping up in those words is what we do. love these. well done.

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  31. Stunning, Grace. Truly I can see your words in my head as I read them. They are so full of imagery. As always, thank you! And, have a fantastic week!! xoxo

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  32. These are both so beautiful Grace. The images are stunning and I feel the words so vividly.

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  33. Dwindling down to a precious few ... you've captured August in its sun-dappled glory.

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  34. Lovely Grace. I particularly like the end of the second one:

    ...words, they keep me
    from drowning.

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  35. "Wind lion maned" Cool!


    ALOHA from Honolulu
    ComfortSpiral
    =^..^= . <3 . >< } } (°>

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  36. words keep me from drowning as well...
    the lion maned wind was a stand out line for me...
    also the clouds dusting your skin....

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  37. Words keep me entertained, the drowning---I'll let you know what stops that once i quit treading water.

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  38. They were both very good, but I loved the first one.

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  39. both gorgeous; the second whispers in my ear more closely, except I haven't been writing much... ~

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