"Everyday in every way I’m getting better and better" - Emile Coue
wow. i feel the weight of the day time mask...of how all the chaos and walking feet...and all that goes into the grit of work and such works its way in...the heart black steeped in tea is a great line as well to end on...
I like how you brought in both day and night...the second stanza being a resolution to the first.
softness of day vs the chill of night. the bare heart, black-steeped in tea is brilliant... the heaviness of the mask is felt throughout ~
Wow Grace-great imagery here!
not pearls but your bare heart, black-steeped in tea...a great line, Grace. Great poem.
Night can bring out the crazies lol or maybe just a little fun
I like how the two stanzas complement each other. 'Not pearls but your bare heart, black-steeped in tea' - amazing image.
This is very effective, Grace. I like the way you worked both day and night!
what price did the fat moon exact from you?not pearls but your bare heart, black-steeped in teaThe most likely expectation is sympathy and concern from the heart though this might not be appreciated - steeped in black! Great lines Grace!Hank
Grace, I can feel the weight in your words..maybe it is all about balance ...
I think we can assign different masks to sometimes get us through our days...and nights. Very strong images, Grace...gave me a feeling of wishing for something else...perhaps dispensing with those masks.
This is a perfect example. Two poems complementing each other.. The day with that city mask, and then the night with its connection to nature.. Both masks a strain in itself.. The fat moon's price.. I like that a lot..
my computer crashed today, so having trouble leaving comments: loved what you did with this one, Grace.
Good imagery !
Very rich verse.
I thought the poems fit, in pace and meter and it was pleasurable to speak them out loud.
summer in the city... there's magic in it but also something revealing... loved esp... not pearls but your bare heart, black-steeped in tea..
What a fantastic, magical poem. The mask is a wonderful piece of art.The combination is great!HugsJetteMajken
totally different for you... a bit of a mystery
The moon and i have a deal, it extracts no price from me and I allow it to maintain its orbit. We negotiated over terms and came to what we considered to be fair.
Great imagery here with black heart as tea...Leaves a lot to ponder and form is great.
so difficult to take off the mask once put on...the last line says it all...
Nice contrast in the two quatrains - has a tanka quality to it - it seems to me.
I imagined Dr. Jekyll/Mr. Hyde. I can imagine darkness as a good foil for bringing out the darkness of the soul and pulling out the lovely veneer that one wears int he light. Happy weekend, Grace. :-)
Lovely ... reminds me of Amsterdam 1970 ... and that was lovely ... smiles
Very nice. Great imagery and awesome fat moon and magic everywhere.
These pair well together. The daylight mask wears heavy. The second piece weighs heavy, bleeding the heart as it does....really like the last line in this one.
these are cool, Grace. hope you have a good weekend ~
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