Sunday, July 20, 2014

This poem is a selfie, nest and doughnut



I.

This poem is busy
As flock of birds scavenging for food in parking lot
As passengers alighting from subway, clutching their
iphones tightly as if their hands are born with it.
As if ears are sockets, forever plugged with noise.
This poem is a selfie.


II.

This poem is made of twigs
A week ago,  I wanted to play god when a baby robin
fell from the small nest, its wet black feathers broken.
But the woman on the phone said, let the mother robin
decide what to do with her baby.  
This poem allows nature to take its course.
This poem is a nest.  


III.

This poem is hungry
As the people lining up at Tim Horton's take out lane.
Some people are lazy, why can't they just go out of their cars
& get it quickly, someone asked.
Maybe they are looking for comfort, I say.  
Maybe every step is jagged stone.
This poem is a doughnut.


IV.

This poem is a socket for selfies.
This poem is a twiggy nest,  now empty of birds. 
This poem is comforting as a take-out doughnut.   



For Imaginary Garden for Real Toads - Boomerang metaphor created by Hannah Gosselin
and Poets United - Thanks for the visit ~

38 comments:

  1. I could go for a donut right now...though I admit, I prefer to go inside than through the drive-thru.

    it is amazing all the things a poem can be. I'm keep trying to picture (no pun intended) a poem trying to take a selfie. an enjoyable read.

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    1. I wanted a modern twist to the poem so I thought the word selfie is fun to work with ~ Thanks RMP ~

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  2. great use of the form Grace...love how the facets of life get transformed at the end....

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  3. This poem form is very intriguing, and I really love yours. It captures such feeling and emotion!

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    1. Thanks as this is my first time to try this form ~

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  4. Allowing nature to take its course can be rough sometimes, guess one just has to chow down on the doughnut lol

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  5. This poem is sad and empathetic by turns with wonderful surprises like "As if ears are sockets, forever plugged with noise." "This poem allows nature take its course.." And best of all: "Maybe every step is jagged stone."

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  6. This is ... an incredibly unique approach to Hannah's form!

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  7. I was surprised to see: This poem is a selfie.. but how well you used that metaphor to create an image of modern society. I also really like the line: Maybe every step is jagged stone... Cause enough for a donut treat.

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  8. Very enjoyable to read, Grace! I especially enjoyed the verse about Tim Horton's. I wonder if this chain will ever spread into the US. I agree about people being too lazy to get out of their car. They waste time and gas when they could just as easily get their food inside.

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  9. very nice read Grace..true this poem is a selfie...

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  10. "This poem is comforting as a take-out doughnut." - indeed it is! A lot of great metaphors in your poem. Have a nice week!

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  11. Grace, I LOVE this poem! Especially "every step is jagged stone" and the nest now empty of birds........LOVE Tim Horton's and the doughnuts in the poem. Love what you did with the form, Grace. It is such an intriguing one, and a poet can fly it anywhere!

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  12. A cute poem, Grace. Selfies (I post them on my blog every now and then), the bird nest (birds and I don't get along), and doughnuts (I haven't even tasted a donut, going on nine years now), all with not much if anything in common have made nice reading as a grouping with your poet's touch.
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  13. interesting combination of images.. let the nature take its course, love that part.

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  14. This poem makes me smile and makes my heart sing. Thank you for sharing.

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    1. This was rather a fun write for me ~ Thank you Kimolisa ~

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  15. Dear Grace! m not sure if my last comment went for approval or what ... i really enjoyed your poem... I love tim hortins myself ... m usually the lazy kinds or the comfort seeker too!! great write!!

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  16. A twiggy nest, now empty of birds. That is a powerful line. Do you mind if I use it to start a new poem?

    I like how your poem seems to begin at 3 disconnected thoughts, only to dovetail towards a deeply-connected ending. I really enjoy reading all of you work, and this poem is no exception.

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    1. Sure you can. But the empty nest reference is because all the baby robins have flown away ~ Thanks kindly for your comments ~

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  17. My goodness, Grace - I love this - filled with twists and unexpected word play - loved it! K

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  18. This poem, was perfectly enjoyable! It totally refreshes the soul.

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  19. This, for me, is brilliant, Grace!! I love your stanzas and how they are so powerful stand-alone but then together POW!! Your three word choices contrast in such a wonderful way. You really brought this form to life, Grace...thank you SO much for writing!!

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  20. And this poem is very original and beautiful.

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  21. I could go for a doughnut...Love how you connected everything...

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  22. I'm curious about this form Hannah's put together. you've formed it well ~

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  23. Wonderful. I like the different combinations, it makes the idea very fun.

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  24. I love how you set this up, Grace. Lots of fun to see the different sides of everything! As always, thank you for sharing and have a great week!

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  25. this poem is pretty dang cool grace....smiles

    love the form hannah created....and really like what you did with it as well...the socket for selfies..ha...maybe they are looking for comfort...arent we all...smiles.

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  26. Tee hee! Way to go, Grace!

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  27. I loved how you looked beyond the apparent and got to the heart of the matter each time, and wove it so beautifully into the 3 stanzas. Awesome!

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