Friday, May 23, 2014

What the sky scatters (aside from my thoughts)


A Glass Raindrop Installation by Stacee Kalmanovsky



Rain, drenching fragile cherry blossoms
Blue in death-tide, white-knuckled in bosom.    

I write on the clouds on my way to work.
They have secrets, I tell them to loudly slurp.

I am an onlooker as passengers knit their time
With books, games & music as train stop grinds. 

I see graffiti on the walls.  Is the fruit too ripe?
My bag is heavy with lunch & rewrites.  

A man comes on board, too eager to preach
His religion, I close my eyes & disengage.

I paint the afternoon sun with emerald glade
Spring is shy maiden in the middle of the lake.

I lose my thread of thoughts, floating between
grooves, until my pen plucks them in midstream.

Crescent moon, meteors flashing the night sky
Perhaps the dome of heaven is so close by.


Posted for D'verse Poets Pub - At the Slant- Using slant rhymes 
And Poetry Jam - Rain - Happy weekend ~

34 comments:

  1. Amazing!

    I tried like some to pick one line that won me over. I could not. The whole is more wonderful as any one part.

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    1. Scattered as my thoughts, ha ~ Thanks Gail ~

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  2. I did not say amazing because of your blog title...which I just now noticed...because I always think of you as Grace.

    I envy your talent.

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  3. Even the busy city has somethings beautiful:-)

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    1. Its part of my everyday, but there's beauty in the city ~ Thanks Vandana ~

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  4. ha. this pops all over...has a nice surreal edge as well...telling it to slurp loudly....smiles...the people knitting their time...its cool....

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  5. i love this flow of beauty...the most striking line to me is "I close my eyes & disengage"..that's one difficult feat to achieve...thanks for this share Grace.... :)

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    1. Some train rides, I just do that ~ Thanks Sumana ~

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  6. I like how you've used slant to make the rhyme subtle - this is like the rocking of the train on the tracks that we feel and adjust to without realizing

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    1. I relied on a dictionary to help me out ~ Thanks :-)

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  7. I agree with Brian-- the initial lines were especially compelling I thought, the writing on the clouds and the passengers knitting the time-- I could see the cherry blossoms caught I. The rain-- all interesting and vivid. Thanks, grace . Wonderful. K.

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  8. I like travelling with you to work. An interesting journey.

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  9. Grace, you always impressed me:)
    Beautiful!

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  10. I loved the idea of cloud writing. Simply, a beautiful piece. Lovely. Am glad I visited.

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  11. Such excitement in a travel.. I can clearly understand how the mind might travel differently than oneself..

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  12. Spring is shy maiden in the middle of the lake... this is cool.. also the writing on the clouds.. i like how you bring in those dreamy images into the reality of a train ride... cool pic as well

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  13. I enjoyed this train ride with you, Grace. I like how your thoughts meander through the poetic and the mundane. A lovely write!

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  14. I like the idea of riding on the clouds on the way to work & all the poetic thoughts shared as your thoughts floated like a spring breeze.

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  15. There is beauty all around us, each and every day, even on a seemingly "normal" commute to work on a seemingly normal day :)

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  16. So beautiful! You write so wonderfully! :-)

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  17. Just have to look I suppose, writing on clouds was great. But still, stuck in traffic stinks haha

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  18. Your words made me smile, a little slanted .. a smile nonetheless.

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  19. Each line is like a raindrop that reflects vignettes of life. :-)

    Happy weekend, Grace. :-)

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  20. There's such a beautiful flow of movement to this peace, felt myself getting carried away with your words as though on that train.

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  21. Heaven is always closer when you're not looking up for it.

    I always wanted to live again in a place with a light rail system for getting hither and yon, the constant lull of the rails gave me pause, I miss it.

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  22. I love the way you observe things that most people would not notice and then you put your observations to beautiful poems together! You are amazingly gifted and I love reading your poems!

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  23. Lovely description of thoughts on the way to work. I could picture you on the train.

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  24. I like the train series - the sense of immediacy, of poetic observation of the mundane mixed with the wonder that lurks behind it ~

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  25. Beautiful that connection of spirit with nature and that reaching out for heaven. Lovely images of the heart.

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  26. "I lose my thread of thoughts, floating between grooves, until my pen plucks them in midstream" Love this line. Travel gives so much time to observe and in some cases withdraw from human life buzzing around us. Beautiful Piece.

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  27. I love the idea of clouds slurping, Grace. Hope you have a great week!

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