Saturday, February 2, 2013

lighted path

Grace @ Everyday Amazing



gift me
a winding path
where no footprints nor twine 
can restrain my verses, broken
& true 
                                 

                 cast me
                 without shadows 
                 to fear unlike puppets 
                 in theatre, silver-masked, hollowed 
                 & less    



                                          steer me
                                          closer to light  
                                          where leaves breathe and the wind
                                          runs like a free bird, majestic 
                                          & healed





Posted for D'verse Poets Pub - Poetics of Groundhog 
and Imaginary Garden with Real Toads - Poetry Form: Cinquain
I have used nature image with syllable count: 2-4-6-8-2

51 comments:

  1. Beautiful, Grace... I especially like:

    steer me
    closer to light
    where leaves breathe and the wind
    runs like a free bird, majestic
    & healed






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  2. nice.. the wind running like a free bird is a really cool image... i also like the form with the three steps..works well with the poem..hmmm..i'm breathing with the leaves..

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  3. Gorgeous. A lighted path, sometimes that's just what we need...beautiful thoughts and use of this form Grace.

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  4. Yes - the cinquain works so well and the poem is like a path - I also like the image of the bird very much. k.

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  5. ..ah yes...let's celebrate into that coming of lighted paths... let's celebrate life once again... amazing Grace...(and yes.. it's a song too..) smiles..

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  6. 'cast me without shadows'
    is the star for me.
    A prayer.

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  7. where the leave breathe and the wind runs like a free bird....would not mind visiting such a path grace....smiles...happy saturday to you...

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  8. This is your style - melodic, soothing, romantic, beautiful. I like the way the verses move, creating a path for our thoughts. Really nice Grace.

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  9. Wonderful Grace, A "lighted path " always makes it easier for one to find their way !! I enjoyed this !!

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  10. Such a path I would like all nice and bright, without any snow in sight.

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  11. I love being cast without shadows and being steered to the light. No greater gift could there be!

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  12. I like the way you've added to the form, with your 'me' and '&'. This poem looks out, beyond and into the wider world with hope and optimism.

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  13. a beautiful set. a beautiful prayer. Amen. So mote it Be.

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  14. such a beautiful path - loved the rhythm and cadence to this - K

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  15. Beautiful. Love the cinquain and the photo!

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  16. Very pretty, Grace..the light on the path is important so we don't turn the wrong way or get lost in the dark...deep meaning here;)

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  17. these are gorgeous, Grace. i knew you would respond beautifully :)

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  18. Simply lovely,,,I would be happy on that path,,,

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  19. A vivid word painting, Grace. I especially love the last stanza. Very well done!

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  20. Beautiful... this flows like a little woodland stream...

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  21. I love the effortless way this reads ... really nice.

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  22. These are great. I do think the second one is my favorite.

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  23. Beautiful - such vivid imagery - love the metaphors

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  24. A serene set of verse steps leading to the light. Nice pic.

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  25. back to say what a beautiful cinquain, which I didn't realize it was the first time I read it..;)

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  26. really nice Grace. Reads somewhat like an affirmation, love the images you bring forth. Great read. Thanks

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  27. Beautiful ... I loved the oath of light !!!

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  28. Sometyhing rather special, this.

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  29. I love the metaphor of the lighted path, so beautifully written. And you did well with the cinquain form :)

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  30. I love the metaphor of the lighted path, beautifully written, and you composed it perfectly in the cinquain form :)

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  31. Yes aptly named Grace and as you cut those puppet strings one by one freeing your limbs to move as you will them, dance with the breezes in the sunshine. I will not dance with you, a fat man dancing shakes the earth to much, but I will applaud your freedom and sense of self.

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  32. Your light touch with syllable-counted poetry is put to amazing effect in this poem sequence, Grace.

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  33. Beautiful, Grace. Happy Sunday :)

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  34. I loved this Grace! Especially the way it's structured! Very unique.

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  35. 0h Grace what a beautiful series!

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  36. Loved the structure and especially steer me closer to light. Beautiful.

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  37. "where leaves breathe and the wind
    runs like a free bird,"

    loved it!

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  38. Wonderful in form and content. I love cinquain and you do it well.

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  39. I espeically love how this ends. Very beautiful.

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  40. you do a good job casting like a shadow and then being steered into the light

    hades gate

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  41. I love the form, the cinquain, gosh I remember we had to write these in school...it was cool, they don't seem to write poetry much in school anymore (pity)...anyway this is lovely, the path, the steps... I really liked the second, it reminded me of those costume balls and the ending to run like a free bird...quite beautiful indeed.

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  42. I love the whole thing especially the ending. It speaks of all the prayers I have had for my oldest daughter that she might be free and healed.

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  43. I enjoyed your take on the prompt :D
    I love how you captured so many moods and ended with
    so much hope!
    I <3 the ending

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  44. "the wind runs like a free bird"

    LOVE that! great response to the prompt, Grace!

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  45. Light, breathing leaves, wind helping bird to fly, freedom, majesty, and healing! Wonder WHY I am so attracted to third word group.
    Thoughtful. Thanks, grace

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  46. I guess we all are longing to head toward the light as we go through this life into the next...this is beautiful in form and words Grace. :-)

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  47. Beautiful words, Grace. I adore that last one. It sings!

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