Friday, December 28, 2012

One golden afternoon

gold and lilac  
wafts and pillars an old man's face --
ethereal sky  

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Picture credit:   Reena of Missing Moments

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the afternoon,
unwrapped burlap, 
shimmers like gold coins under the sun 



Posted for Imaginary Garden with Real Toads - A Word with Laurie 
Haiku My Heart
and Haiku Heights - New ~   HAPPY NEW YEAR ~

49 comments:

  1. The 2nd haiku is so beautiful ... lovely scenery glowed by words !!!

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  2. Ahh... so beautiful. I especially like the second one, Grace. Thanks for taking part in the prompt.

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  3. Extremely pretty!
    Even the photograph is very beautiful.

    You have a beautiful way of conveying.

    Take Care :)

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  4. The second haiku is just breathtaking!

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  5. This is so rich in word and picture. Thank you Grace for this beauty...

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  6. Both are beautifully composed.

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  7. Both are wonderful ~ favorite is the 2nd one ~ ^_^

    Happy New Year to you ~ (A Creative Harbor aka ArtMuseDog and Carol ^_^)

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  8. Love the gold coins shimmering under the sun! Happy New Year!

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  9. The visual perfectly illustrates your brief and beautiful piece. Lovely!

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  10. You write so beauty-fully...
    I snuck a peek below to read more, just wonderful♥

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  11. Such a nice sight and brought to life, wish it were that here instead of the snow that is to come.

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  12. All the best things come in burlap -- coffee, wheat, afternoons. Love that! And old men's faces are great aren't they for comparing things to.

    Hope you have had a great day!

    xoxo

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  13. I love the reference to an old man's face. Your second haiku is brilliant!

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  14. nice...i really like that second one grace...the afternoon being unwrapped burlap, the shimmering gold coins....very nice...

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  15. These are magical!! Grace, I equally enjoy the images you depict in each. So well done...powerful brevity!

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  16. Simply beautiful..awesome.. gold sprikled..

    Thanks Grace for the magic.. Happy haikuing..!!!

    RS:)

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  17. I really like that second with the shimmering gold coins.

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  18. Second one is gorgeous.Happy new Year Grace!

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  19. I really like the first one most of all. I enjoy a poem that makes me mull it over and "finish the poem" as the haiku experts say.

    A nice challenge, this second line: "wafts and pillars an old man's face." I have several images in my mind and it's fun to decide which one applies.

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    1. I like the "unfinished" side of haiku and letting the readers decide on the message ~ Thanks for sharing your thoughts ~

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  20. Lovely--and interesting form. I see both are still seventeen syllables, but don't follow the 5-7-5 format. I'm a creature of habit; I stick with 5-7-5 or 3-5-3 for better or worse, but I might try branching out just a little :)

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    1. The English language is different from Japanese so a little leeway is now acceptable. I use to write in such strict format, but have now allowed my lines to find itself, but still within the 17 syllables ~ Thanks for sharing your thoughts ~

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  21. Beautiful haiku both. You captured the essence of the pic.

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  22. Fab' image and the two haiku do it more than justice. (Nice to see you are not bound by the 5-7-5 formula.)

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    1. Thank you Dave ~ I like experimenting with the form ~

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  23. framing an old man's face . . . unwrapping the burlap on the day ....each got me dreaming of the relationship between positive and negative (space) and how they dress the same coin.

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  24. I always come to your blog knowing that I will find a completely different approach to a challenge. This is shimmeringly beautiful, Grace.

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  25. dear all,
    i started early friday with such a bright hope for the day. so many haiku to visit, so many bright promises to fulfill. my day turned quickly on its heels into what became a living hell. for the last three weeks i have been battling extreme health concerns, i share this only to explain why i have been so hard pressed in visiting and leaving comments. yesterday took me to the very edge and this morning although i made it through an adverse med reaction with horrible vertigo, i am weak and undone. i do not like to write about my health issues, something i combat everyday to stay upright and among the living. but i see more and more of our haiku family dwindling away and i am sure many may have mistaken why, and taken it personally that i have failed to visit. this morning i am going to stay up long enough to be sure you all know that you have brought me comfort in my darkest hours without even knowing. for your kindness and patience i thank you with all my heart.

    xoxoxox,
    rebecca

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    1. I understand Rebecca, please don't worry about visiting others as your health is more important ~ Blessings for good health and love ~

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  26. perfectly sublime; straight to the heart.
    Happy New Year to you!

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  27. Two beautiful haiku, Grace, and I adore the title "One golden afternoon"...so lovely.
    K

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  28. AAh,I wonder what there might be to unwrap in the shimmer of the sunset?

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  29. I like the image of the unwrapped burlap. Happy holidays.

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  30. Both haiku wonderful, both full of graceful words.
    My favorite line: shimmers like gold coins under the sun.
    Happy New Year!
    (I think one "n" is gone in the afternoon, Grace)

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  31. The image of the ethereal sky and your shimmering poetry evoked warmth and joy...lovely haiku..

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  32. Your writing shimmers today! Happy New Year, Grace!

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  33. Lovely, both picture and haiku! Happy new year, Grace!!

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  34. I like the image of unwrapped burlap. Your words always shimmer. Happy New Year, Grace! Wishing you all the best. :-)

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