Monday, October 22, 2012

Colors of autumn



pale skin under the sky 
bare limbs, empty of sheath   
color of autumn - cherry red
like your lips - parting mine 

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falling leaves on green meadow  
caressing softly  arms  and  hips 
color of autumn - golden orange
like your hands - warming fire 


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half-crescent moon in cool night 
glimmering dew on maple skin
color of autumn - plum purple 
like your eyes - raging storm


Posted for OpenLinkNight - Imaginary Garden with Real Toads (Monday)
and D'verse Poets Pub (Tuesday)

Poetry form:   Jue ju (Chinese)

Line length: 5 words per line
Lines per stanza: 4
Theme: Often suggestive of erotic love
Rhyme scheme: couplets or unrhymed


Picture credit:  here

50 comments:

  1. I love autumn colors Grace!!
    This is really beauty!!

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  2. unrhymed you say, who made up such a rule for display? haha Truly brought into play factors that are great to touch, as fall rings through very much. First first, Brian is worst.

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    1. Pfft glory dear is going back in the dirt.

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    2. Pat you are so funny ~ Ha..ha...Thanks for the visit ~

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  3. Mmmm
    Parting lips
    Warming fires
    Raging storms
    A lovely night to stay in, i say
    And Grace, just to remind you~you're north of the border
    Good luck making white sensual
    hee hee

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    1. I'm trying Rick ~ Thanks for the lovely words and comments ~

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  4. color of autumn - plum purple
    like your eyes - raging storm

    I like the 3rd stanza. It's in keeping with the erotic stance of the form. Nicely Grace!

    Hank

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  5. nice...i love how these build in intensity....as you close each one its like a nice BANG of intimacy...esp that first one...well done grace....love them...

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  6. The colors of cherry red, golden orange, plum purple enrich the lines you have written on this title!

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  7. so well done! You captured all the beauty of the season in this one!

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  8. These go magnificently together! Really enjoyed the flow of these stanzas - each could be its own painting!

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  9. A wonderful take on autumn ... loved it :-)

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  10. ' Like your lips, like your hands, like your eyes '....and your words, basking in sensuality, dripping with syrupy maple sweetness....

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  11. I find it hard to write with the confines of style, but you did it so well. Great form too.

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  12. I just learned a new poetry form, lovely. I like how you weaved the colors of autumn with sensuality. Well done! :)

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  13. Very pretty sensual poems. Lovely. k.

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  14. Lovely parade of increasingly intense colors through this, pacing the sense of intimacy. I like this form, very well done here, Heaven.

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  15. So, so beautiful. Sensual, loving. I love the tenderness in all of this. The beauty of autumn is here in full now. Yesterday, I walked through an almost, red carpet of leaves. Amazing. Loved this Grace.

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  16. Masterful. Gorgeous, Grace. You are one of my favorites that I've come across on the web. Thanks for sharing!

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  17. lovely and sensuous....enjoyed the verses very much and also the picture..thanks

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  18. Autumn colors seem to spread--like the plumes of a male peacock--in order to seduce to touch the "reader" with the power of gods.

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  19. Lovely! I'm not familiar with that from, but I liked it.

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  20. fabulous use of the form... love, love, love the imagery

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  21. I'm not familiar with this form but you've made it sound beautiful... I especially liked

    color of autumn - cherry red
    like your lips - parting mine

    You do have a beautiful way with words. I just noticed your statement that you've been writing since 2010? Wow... I'm very impressed. You make it look so easy.

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    1. I am a late bloomer in writing ~ Thank you, but I owe a lot to the communities I am involved in like Real Toads and D'verse ~

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  22. hmmm...some nice heat in those...autumn is a sensual season for sure..

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  23. A person could follow the sun and never be out of summer...this makes me want to follow autumn. Great job!

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  24. Such beautiful colors and images, Grace. I like how each one reminds you of someone.

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  25. Your lovely poem evokes the BEST of autumn, Grace.

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  26. Very kool. I like the way it sounded out loud. I'm going to see a girl tomorrow with a far east accent and have her read it to me. I have to know what it sounds like. I bet it rocks. Excellente write!

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  27. Lovely. The image of leaves brushing against her body, gorgeous. Glimmering dew, maple, and plum...so delicious. Love the passion in the end. Such a treat, Grace!

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  28. love the touch of sensuality! wonderful, Heaven!

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  29. I like this. How nice to juxtapose autumn with passion. Your writing is always unique.

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  30. Gorgeous! Love the exchange (dance?) of colors and passion, a wonderful rhythm and flow, love those images too. :-)

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  31. Absolutely gorgeously woven! Really lovely piece, pleased to read you again hon xoxo

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  32. Jue ju is a form I hadn't encountered before and I love your poems subtle eroticism...in my opinion, it is so much more effective than that which is blatantly expressed. Beautiful juxtaposition of autumn and love.

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  33. It's such a beautiful palette of colors and words... and so sensual!

    I love how you multitask!

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  34. Nicely done...especially with the progression and erotic content ;)

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  35. Just beautiful ... exquisite!!

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  36. Gorgeous Grace--this form suits your writing style so well!

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  37. Spectacular photo - I love how you wove the beauty of autumn through the way you see the one you love. Very beautiful.

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  38. This is very vivid. I love the colors of autumn.

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  39. autumn motifs have always been my fave!

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  40. The photo is as lovely as your words. Well done!

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